Talk:Overview of the Gallente Federation
Hi^^ Just small things... ", due to the Minmatar numbering almost one-third of the total population of the Federation" ...I have just in mind that 1/5 of thé Minmatar resides within the Gallente Federation...
2nd thing: The Minmatar are a race not a Bloodline... so better maybe change it to "some minmatar tribes like the Sebiestor, Krusual, Brutor and Vherokior numbering etc....
3rd
Cordiality with the Amarr Empire
"Though culturally and ideologically polar opposites, with the Gallente people having no love for slavery or the Amarrian religion," actuallly in the Burning Life (Novel) the fugitive couple mention nothing about "no love":P, ehm... I had the feeling that Hjalti Danielsson (CCP Abraxas) has just bring the faith thing up (I mean in the Book about the wife)... to show ah conflict about the two empires "superficial" (Fed) vs. "blind faith" (Empire). So I would keep the slavery part but I would change the Amarrian religous part to maybe "don´t care so much"
4th
Economy
The Gallente Federation is the largest and wealthiest economy... In the Empyrean Age (Novel) just mention that is like a "paradise" no unemploment before the war 110 etc....
So that is it so far... I have just read it fast through, but all in all looks good.... maybe change some superlative... So that it looks more neutral... but nice work maybe add soem links...
PV 6:07, 17 March 2011 (UTC)
To Point 4^^ lol... YOu have copy the info from the Foiritan speach^^
http://www.eveonline.com/news.asp?a=single&nid=3296&tid=4
but ehm .... what me more worries is... How can I say it...ehm... for Example:
The Khanid Kingdom part:
Relations with other factions and groups
It is unknown if the Federation maintains diplomatic relations with the Ammatar Mandate, but relations are poor with the Khanid Kingdom, due to accusations that the nation has launched raids into the Federal space to capture Gallente slaves. Moreover, it is widely known that King Khanid II has a former Gallente celebrity as a slave in his court, angering the Federal population.
The Khanid Kingdom (Chronicle) mention just a slave.... no raids into the Federal space what so ever:P Thats why I have made the fiction template:(... there are small errors.... even in the pdf... through some attempts to fill the gap in the lore... I would keep the parts open.
but all in all great work.... keep going and add some links... so the reader can get lost in the evelopedia
Totally forgot this: PV 22:00, 17 March 2011 (UTC)