Talk:Angel Hideaway

Changes

ISD Detroit:

The changes you made to this page creates a lot of confusion.

I spend a lot of time completing the sites, making notes and then adding the information to these pages.

I will be placing all my work on 'Watch' list and if any changes other than adding more information is done, I'll revert the page.

DeMichael Crimson 8-24-2011

Re: Changes

DeMichael, I'll try and explain the changes I made to the page.

First, I created a new template specifically for Cosmic Anomalies. It is described here Template:Cosmic_anomaly. I moved some of the specific information from the body of the article to the template to facilitate easy comparison with other anomalies based on the template entries. This includes anomaly type (hub, den, hidden hub, sanctum) , associated faction, exact security ranges for random spawns ( 1.0, 0.9, 0.7, -0.4) with colorization, regions where a pilot might find a random spawn of the cosmic anomaly. Finally, I included entries that indicate the highest possible security space where a Pirate Detection Array of each given level will find instances of the cosmic anomaly.

Second, I corrected a number of capitalization and grammar errors. Many words were capitalized for no reason (class, cosmic anomaly, veldspar, asteroids, and frigate). The article began with the phrase "Angel Hideaway is" which doesn't make grammatical sense without a preceding article (an or the). A number of phrases are unnecessarily redundant in their word use ( "The Anomaly site itself is a small open location", "The names and amount of ships spawning may vary but each spawn will only be Frigate class" ). Level 2 headers are automatically in bold.

Thirdly, the quote template is designed to replicate a block quote and therefore be used when a large quote needs to be separated from a large block of text. Utilizing it for single line quotes disrupts the flow of content, causes color and tone changes throughout the page, and minimizes the visual strength of spawn titles. To that extent, I removed the constant Message in Local Chat Channel lines, removed the usage of the quote template, moved the quotes inline with their corresponding spawn title, and finally formatted them in quotation marks and italics.

Organizationally, I moved the information about structures into the subsections for each spawn. Most users looking for information about a specific version will probably want to learn structure information within the version description, rather than in a separate section.

Finally, I changed the text about a domination commander NPC to domination frigate.

All of these change were made in an attempt to improve the readability and usability of the information found on the page.

As it stands now, the article incorrectly and redundantly uses the template type value Cosmic Anomaly instead of hideaway. It also has a security value from a less descriptive highsec instead of 1.0 - 0.9. It no longer has the word "the" at the beginning of the article. It also includes the redundant wording "the anomaly site itself". It uses the term "triggered with" instead of "triggered by". The block quotes as well as the lines repeating "Message in Local Chat Channel" are again present. Level 2 headers are unnecessarily made bold. Finally, the word frigate indicated the size of the domination spawn was removed.

I hope that you will understand the intent behind my changes. I will give you a week or so to respond before making any further changes this or any other cosmic anomaly pages. I would only ask that you continue to communicate like you did here in the future.

--Thanks ISD Detroit 21:07, 6 September 2011 (UTC)