Difference between revisions of "Talk:After the Fall (Chronicle)"

Latest revision as of 05:06, 2 April 2013

A few things:

"I think we lashed out as much as ourselves and our own ineffectiveness as we did at the invading force." should read "I think we lashed out as much at ourselves and our own ineffectiveness as we did at the invading force." with 'as' changing to 'at'

Furthermore, you have it down that, "Also, I got a dog, who I quickly grew fond of but somehow never got around to naming.", and then later "That day I made my way into the city, asking around, looking for him, shouting his name.". Did I miss the part where the man named the dog?

Also, you mention, "I rushed to get a ladder and climbed up on my roof", but later, "I slowly crawled on my hands and knees until I got to the stairs, which I went down one careful step at a time until I reached the garden."... did the ladder turn into stairs or was there a hole in the roof?

Finally, "The next thing I knew, I was lying flat on my back, still on the roof, shaken and half-deaf." I think you may have overlooked the speed of sound vs light. He would have had time to see an impact, then, several seconds (or even minutes) later heard/felt the blast wave. (See Chelyabinsk meteor, or the bomb scene in True Lies... also for some fallout scenarios see Tsar Bomba)

--Faulx 16:46, 25 March 2013 (GMT)

Fixed, thanks!--CCP Abraxas 11:06, 2 April 2013 (GMT)